Book Name: Is Humanity the Real Sanity?

Author: @blackpumpkin

Reviewer: @Chaotic_Lals

Cover: 02/05

The cover wasn't exactly visually appealing. The fonts did not go with the theme of the background. The same goes for the author's handle — it looks awkward. As for the figure, it looks out of place, especially with the circle behind it. The elements do not go with each other in the cover. In terms of relevance, I believe the cover doesn't really give that 'dramatic' vibe the title gives. So I think you could work on that?

Title: 04/05

To be honest, I like the title. I think it's relevant enough to the plot of the book. Even though the book hasn't really taken that actual turn to the plot, I feel it coming (don't ask me how, please). So yes, good job~

Synopsis: 06/10

Ah, there's a lot going on in the synopsis, isn't there? Before I get into the main part, I want to mention that for the synopsis of a book, only a peek into the book is to be there. After the blurb, you've added a disclaimer too. That should be there within the book — not in the blurb. The credits and related aspects are fine, but nothing other than that. When you write a book, present it like you'd write an actual hardcopy of it, hm?

Now getting into the errors, you have to pay attention the commas to be used. I've explained this further into the review. Apart from that, I think you need to provide more clarity to ideas to try to convey in the synopsis, you know? I don't mean that you need to reveal things — it's that some parts of the synopsis are unclear. For instance, take the very first line. You say that the protagonist tortures people 'for fun', but then you mention that she does it for a reason. That doesn't really go well, right? Then, capitalization. You unnecessarily used caps for the terms 'herself' and 'insane', when you could just have just used italics.

These errors aside, the synopsis doesn't reveal too much, and not too little either. It was just right. So good job!

Execution: 04/10

In the beginning of each chapter, you give this poetic verse, which I find very creative. However, in some chapters, their structure seems a bit off, you know? Like, you break them off to the next line, in the wrong places, and it kind of ruins that 'flow'. So I think you need to be a bit more careful?

Overall, the execution could've been way better, considering the good plot. It goes for all the aspects of the book, excluding the title.

Plot: 13/20

The plot was good, to be honest. Even though it isn't exactly something 'new', you had a good idea on how to execute it. Many a times, I just felt that you kept on lagging it. Also, must I mention, the grammar & the writing style as a whole kind of overshadowed the plot, you know? Like, it was hard to comprehend things.

Writing Style: 10/20

Even though you have a good idea in writing descriptions, the sentences you construct are way too long. When you do that, the paragraph-long sentence automatically becomes kind of mundane. On top of that, the concepts you try to convey are almost never clear.

I don't exactly know what else to say on the writing style . . . I only know that you have to work on sentence constructions more, you know? You use the right words most of the time, but, you don't put them together the ight way, and that's where the problem lies.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 09/20

There were a handful of errors in the grammar followed in the book. First, I'll just explain the couple of errors I've already mentioned in the previous parts of this review. Regarding the commas, you need to use them wherever you'd pause in a sentence, right? So basically, you just say sentences in your mind (you can't exactly 'say' in your mind, but you get my point right-), and check whether or not you'd pause. Let's take the first sentences of the book's synopsis for instance.

'This tale is dedicated to a female psychopath named Elena more precisely "E" who tortures people of all ages for fun but with a clear reason.'

First off, here, the 'E' wasn't really supposed to be quotes. Now, for the commas. Don't you think this seems better? 'This tale is dedicated to a female psychopath named Elena, or more precisely, E, who tortures people . . .

In a write-up, in this case, your book, you use italics for emphasis. Using caps is for a different purpose. They're use to convey more of screaming, anger . . . or you know, similar emotions. For emphasis, you use italics, not caps.

Many a times, you miss out on punctuations like question marks or exclamation points within a dialogue's double quotes. Also, I noticed that you use semi-colons unnecessarily. Semi colons are used only to join two clauses, without a conjunction. You used them elsewhere — i.e., instead of full stops and commas.

Moving on, we have ellipsis. The universal value of an ellipsis is 3 periods only. Using more or lesser than the mentioned value is grammatically incorrect; it applies for both poems & other write-ups. In addition, you use way too many ellipsis. Avoid using them unnecessarily.

In a dialogue — when you use American English, to be particular — when the speaker addresses something in quotes, single quotes are used — not double. For instance, let's take a sentence from the first chapter of the book: "That's Elena's house, you work with "E", ..."

First off, like I mentioned, the 'E' is supposed to be in single quotes, and not double. Then, we have the ellipsis & the comma you used in the end. Both of them were completely unnecessary. A full stop would've done the job.

Such errors run throughout the book. Many a times, like I mentioned under 'writing style', disrupts the flow of the chapter in itself.

Also, there's no need to use a comma along with an ellipsis; it's grammatically incorrect.

The vocabulary needs a lot of work. The sentence constructions are completely fumble. For instance, again let's take a sentence from the first chapter: "Yeah, and what represents E, Eris, or Enyo? I replied sarcastically." still loud.

Here, you tried to imply something else, but when you constructed the sentence, it was a completely different story. It was supposed to be 'What does 'E' represent? Eris, or Enyo?' Also, the 'I replied sarcastically' was not to be in the double quotes.

Characters & Development: 06/10

I can't really put a finger on their personalities, to be honest. They weren't described enough. The same goes for the emotions. You could've made more detailed descriptions at some places. You know, to convey their thinking manner, etc. I don't really know about development since the book is still at its starting point. Good luck, though!

Total: 54/100

Final Note: Please do not get discouraged or demotivated. I'm trying to help you here and no, I'm not one to beat around the bush or sugarcoat my words. It's pretty obvious that you have the potential to become a good writer. You can always improve yourself and your skills with practice, patience and time, hm? Don't hesitate to hit me up if you have any queries ;)