Book Name: The AlphaAlpha

Author: notinnocentJiks

Reviewer: Riya

Title: 5/10

I don't like the title much. Yes, it was straightforward but it lacked creativity a lot. While giving a title to a book or a story or a poem, one needs to be creative to attract attention. I didn't find the title much attractive, in my opinion.

Cover: 9/10

The cover was really great. I liked it a lot. It was really beautiful according to me. Even though you weren't the one who made it, it still suited the book and gave the fantasy vibe needed. 

Description: 3/5

The description for me wasn't something that made me curious. A very simple and cliche story. It didn't lure me into reading it. And there in the description you wrote "and" as "n", always avoid using short forms, while writing in narration and or dialogue unless it's something like "doin' ", or "goin' ", because this sometime how we speak, but always avoid using short forms like "n", writing why as "y", you can use them while showing text conversation between two people to make it look more casual and more realistic. 

Reader's Interaction: 9/10

I like how you interact with your readers. Keep going. Keep it up.

Plot: 4/10

I didn't like the plot, I will be honest. The plot was cliche and though I loved the idea of AlphaAlpha, you could have given this amazing idea a better plot. There were so many different things you could have done, you could have been more creative. Even the simple idea of just finding out if Jimi accepts Jungkook's feelings and if they be together, you know...I really don't know who out my words...maybe when you say that you could have taken a different route to reach the destination. Even though longer, it would have been a great journey for you. I don't know why I am being so poetic. So yeah...I would have also liked to read it. You plot seemed rushed, like you wanted to start it and finish it the same moment. Let me give you an example, at the very first you throw Jimin into the coma, it was really exaggerated, a person to the most faints or say becomes unconscious, going straight into coma is a bit too much. If you wanted to could have shown him being in the coma in the mid chapters, not in the starting itself. You were complicating the plot just like that, if you had wanted you could have made it more smooth and in flow. And I just wanted to say this that you had some smut parts, I suggest you to remove the details, as they are looking very out of place, it will be better if you only write the starting make-out scene and the end cuddling part. I suggest you to take the book down, take some time, think and then edit the book again and publish it again, I am saying this because I see the potential in you, I see that you can do great ahead and have a lot of potential. The rest is your wish. 

Grammar and Vocabulary: 10/20

There were a little lot grammatical mistakes. And even the vocabulary,like you could have used some more beautiful and better words. If you don't know it's okay, the search for the synonyms, you could have made the sentences sound more meaningful and better. But that "could have" you know….anyways, try to do better in future and develop more as an author.

Plot twists and attraction: 7/10

The plot twists weren't that big nor much small. They weren't that overwhelming or something that changed the whole route of the plot. But they were fine. 

Emotions and Character development: 8/10

I felt the emotions. They were nicely portrayed and it showed that you as a author felt those emotions. About the character development part, it could have been better. Keep improving.

Creativity and way of writing: 4/10

You weren't creative. Like,some of your idea were creative, but you didn't have that idea that great of plot, just like I said earlier. 

Opinion: 5/10

I think you have a lot to improve. There is very long way for you to go, don't worry you have the capability but you just don't know how to do it. And I really hope my review helps you find out your weak points and strong points. 

Total: 64/100