🔪》Title, Cover, & Blurb

The title fits the story and it's capitalized correctly. It also attracts readers to the story. The cover is alright, however, I don't think it fits the story. There's also quite a bit of empty space. The title is also kinda close to the top of the cover. I recommend moving the flower and text down a bit. The blurb introduces the main characters and the story well. It was easy to read and it draws readers in.

🔪》Plot

The plot of the story is clear and easy to understand, however, it's not engaging. The readers are simply told everything that's happening. They don't get to see the BAU investigating and gathering clues. They don't get to see Ethan finding or going after victims. Also, include the letter that Ethan sent to the police. The plot is progressing too quickly, time passing has been mentioned a few times. In the fourth chapter Ethan is already feeling regret and wanting redemption. Also, in only three chapters the investigation has progressed a lot. Expand on the events and show the readers what's happening. It's also only chapter five and it feels like the book is almost over. The exposition needs to introduce the characters and the world better. Ethan is introduced quite a bit, however, Agent Winter and the rest of the BAU team isn't introduced. I'm confused about when the prologue takes place. Does it take place before or after the first chapter?

🔪》Characters

As mentioned, Ethan is introduced, however, the other characters aren't. I'm assuming the Olivia mentioned in the blurb is Agent Winter. In the story, she's only referred to as agent winter. Descriptions of the characters' appearances also need to be added. The characters' personalities also need to be shown throughout the chapters. Ethan's is told to the readers, but it needs to be shown. Ethan feeling regret and deciding he wants redemption doesn't really make sense and isn't believable. His character hasn't had time to develop yet. The readers aren't able to connect to any of the characters. They don't know anything about Agent Winter and the rest of the BAU team.

🔪》Grammar/Spelling

I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors in the chapters.

🔪》Writing Style

The writing style needs a lot of work. You tell the readers everything that's happening instead of showing them. Instead of saying "Upon their arrival, Agent Winter and her team were met with a mix of relief and apprehension from the local police," show the readers. Show the BAU team arriving and discussing the case with the police. Show the emotion through dialogue and descriptions of the characters' actions. Show the readers the team investigating and collecting clues. Also, show the readers the characters' emotions. You also repeat phrases/ideas quite a bit. For example, you said a few times the rash is a visible manifestation of Ethan's inner turmoil/chaos. The readers understand that and don't need to be reminded that often what the stress rash represents. Another example is in chapter three you have these sentences: "But little did he know that his actions had not gone unnoticed. There were those who would stand against him, determined to bring an end to his reign of terror." Then the next paragraph begins with: "Unbeknownst to Ethan, a group of individuals, each with their own set of skills and secrets, had come together with a singular purple - to stop him at all costs." You don't need to state the idea in the previous paragraph and the one after because it's repetitive. The chapters are also very short despite and, as mentioned, the plot is progressing quickly. Everything needs to be expanded upon, more information and descriptions need to be added.

🔪》Enjoyment

The story was boring and I wouldn't read on. The readers are told everything and I'm not pulled into the story. I'd like to see the team investigating the case and gathering clues. I'd also like to see Ethan's thought process and him choosing/stalking victims.

🔪》Overall

Overall, the story needs to be developed more and the pacing needs to slow down. The events are just told to the readers and aren't expanded upon. Show the readers what's happening with descriptions instead of telling them. Descriptions of the characters and the scenery also need to be added. The characters also need to be developed more. The readers aren't given much information about them, other than Ethan. Other than Agent Winter, we don't know who's on the BAU team. Be careful to not repeat ideas/information too much in the story so it doesn't get repetitive for the readers. Good luck with your story!