Title: FRIGHT SCHOOL BOOK 1

Author: kacquah

description: 

Welcome to the world of magic, secrets and villains. By reading this book you allow this world to completely take you, to overwhelm you and to narrate to you the lives of peoples that are going to be changed forever.
In this world exists Vampires. Werewolves. Mummies and more.Fright School has them all. Each race keeps to themselves, with little to no contact with the human world.All that changes when certain teenagers whose lives seem to be predestined by a group of Warlords to face an inescapable force are targeted for their individual secrets and abilities they harbour.  

Each of them must learn to overcome their own obstacles and work together to uncover the many secrets that may very well determine their fates.

title/cover:

title: the title is very fitting for the book. the author emphasized in the introduction that this book actually started out as a comic, which is why this type of title works well. i have no criticisms of it, simply because it seems like a volume of books, with different and scary creatures within each one.

score: 5/5

cover: 

the cover is kind of dim/blurry. it could be brightened up, but other than that, it gives off some creepy vibes, which is what the book is aiming for. the background is blurry and it's difficult to distinguish the (trees?), so i'd just recommend clearing it up so that it stands out more!

score: 3/5

total: 8/10

summary/hook:

summary: the summary gives the readers a good idea of the types of creatures and characters in the book, without giving away too much information; however, i found that there isn't much about the plot. we are told that there will be challenges and obstacles and such, but it may be better if the author included more detail. 

some small suggestions (mostly grammar):

"exists" should be changed to "exist" since it's followed by more than one creature

"All that changes" is a big vague and too casual. perhaps rephrase to "The world of Fright school is altered when..."

i also suggest cutting out "...to face an inescapable force..." or perhaps placing it somewhere else, because the sentence becomes too long.

the last sentence is great! conveys the urgency of their actions.

score: 3/5

hook:

"The man knew they were coming. All the signs pointed to it."

right away, we're thrown into the action. as soon as i read this, i was asking myself questions, like who is coming? the signs pointed to what? this hook has an enticing effect on readers. small suggestion to add "of" between "All the".

the following paragraphs dive into a character so far labeled as "the man" and his escape from a monster/creature that has not been revealed yet. there is a lot of action and great description to go along with it.

score: 4/5

total: 7/10

grammar/flow:

the grammar is clean for the most part, and there were not many spelling mistakes that i noticed. there is one issue that is recurring: punctuation.

instead of writing:

"Leave me alone," he groaned.

the author writes:

"Leave me alone" he groaned,

omitting the punctuation before the dialogue ends. this issue should be addressed just because of technicality. 

the author provides beautiful descriptions and details, especially when the scene is full of action. this brings the book to life.

the pacing is perfect in the first few chapters. i did not notice much info-dumping; rather, the information was revealed either through dialogue or through action, which works really well.

score: 8/10

plot:

there is so much going on in this story, that it's somewhat difficult to keep track of all of the characters. they are introduced, but not elaborately. we are given a lot of names and different environments, and the book bounces back and forth between characters.

the author does a wonderful job of adding suspense to the story, as well as thrill. we are constantly exposed to new worlds and characters, all unique from one another. there are mummies! i've never read a book with mummies! 

the prologue was very well-written, which can be tricky. it provides a vivid action scene that leaves us with many questions, and it even includes humor.

score: 8/10

characters:

the first thing i noticed was the repetition of "The man" in the prologue. it's understood that the identity of this character should not be revealed yet, but "man" became very repetitive, which messed with the flow a bit. a suggestion is to use different ways to refer to this character.

there are so many diverse characters in this story, that i don't even know where to start! they're all individually crafted, with their own unique stories. 

what i believe would add to the story more are descriptions of the characters. the author does a splendid job of describing scenery and action itself, but the characters could be described well, especially because they're so mystical. 

score: 8/10

all in all, FRIGHT SCHOOL BOOK 1 is a fun book full of diversity and many different stories coming together. the author is very talented and obviously possesses a passion for writing this story. i recommend this story to readers of adventure, paranormal, and spiritual genres!