The Witching Hour by @the_escapee

The opening was great. Very effective use of a one-liner.

Having action with dialogue for the wrong person was confusing. Make sure you have what someone says and their actions in one paragraph and don't mix them with other people since it's very confusing as to who is doing what.

Specify about the bread roll, as I said before.

Ailith was a very likeable character. All the others were very developed so well done.

Comma before names.

Good world building. Everything was described in detail and the setting was immersive.

Some issues with paragraph breaks but not many.

Minor errors but, again, really not that many. Overall this was a fantastic book with really no bad comments at all!!

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