Kidnapped By the King by @adreenfernano

A fantastic prologue. It was short and snappy but contained all the necessary information it needed.

Tenses are still a problem - keep everything in the past!!

Same with the other book, stick to one style (either American or British).

Italics for thoughts.

Synonyms were a little bit of an issue. It seems like you're just using too many fancy words which looks out of place. I would keep it simple so there is maximum clarity.

Beautiful description. Really appreciate that.

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