Winning Her Heart by @Skymoon6311

Bland descriptions in the prologue. It's also short so you could really use this to your advantage and get some better writing in there.

What's up with the italics? (I mean on the chapters that aren't prologues.)

Commas before names.

Tenses were a little off.

Descriptions certainly improved in the first chapter.

New speaker=new line.

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