The Book of Trials by @Kehanni

CHAPTERS 4-6

Colloquial language should be avoided for this style (e.g. Practically and basically).

Good development with the plot (especially with the bandits and the trip).

Dialogue was occasionally not formatted right.

Apart from that, no more errors!!

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