Forget Me by @Riodejenerio

This read like poetry. Was that intentional?

Basic grammar was sometimes off (things like not capitalising your I's and verbs not conjugated properly).

Ellipsises only need to be 3 dots. Any more and it looks a bit forced.

Keep it in the past tense. There were times when you slipped into present.

The part in the first chapter where it 'snaps back into reality' was a little confusing. Was it a change of POV because it read like one and yet there was no indication that it was so.

Thoughts don't need speech marks.

Good use of italics for emphasis.

The word choices were good. I could really feel the main character's pain.

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