Elemorts by @Muaaz-ics
CHAPTERS 4-6

Again, really not much to say.

Descriptions were great. World building was great. Characters were great.

Numbers spelled out look more formal.

Commas before names (I only saw one occasion).

Good use of italics for emphasis.

Tension was kept high throughout, which was a plus.

Good that each chapter has a different POV - it intrigues me how you'll make it all fit together in the end because having that many may lead to trouble later on.

Maybe have a map?

Overall, a great continuation. Bit lengthy at times but good quality.

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