Night Time by loveeboat

Okay, first impression: the cover looks nice. The summary is short, simple yet mysterious.

I like it :)
Sure,maybe it'd be better if longer.
Like, add some stuff about how perfect she feel with him, or mention him always coming to comfort her, or that her world is already dark, and it gets darker or something...? (I'm sorry,I've never really write romance, and my BENEDICT story is an unpublished pile of mess...)

Thpugh, the description makes me wonder; what do you mean darkness? What?!

So I read it.

At first, like Dolly, I thought it was about a girl who typically hurt herself, be all confident in the day and suffer in the night.

And again, boy, was I wrong.

In the first chapter, a boy comforted her in the night. I have no feeling here at first, just questions. Who is this guy?
That's a good thing, letting readers ask questions.

Then I read them all, because it was so addictive.

WHY?!!

I've read how her parents suck, and even if you didn't really tell much about them, readers get the message; let's just say her life isn't sunshine and rainbows.

I ship this girl with her friend, so much.
She loves him.
And he loves her.

It's heart wrenching.
It's so sad.
I'm not giving any spoilers here...

And I can't really find any grammar or spelling error.

I'm very sorry if this isn't constructive enough, but this happens sometimes. :3 forgive me :3

Congratulations!! 9/10 !
I'd recommend it to my friends!
Good job :3