Here we have an oc for an original universe by puredeparture
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
This sounds really interesting and I commend you for taking inspiration from a real life outbreak. The Flare is also a good thing to follow since James Dashner did an incredible job creating a fictional disease.
Character information
This is pretty well done and I like her so far. All I can tell you to do is develop this further and add more details.
Relationships
These relationships are pretty detailed and well thought out so there's not really anything I can say here as long as they're shown to help develop her.
Backstory
This is a pretty interesting story and I like how the virus can be slowed but never killed because that's how virus' actually work. They invade the cell and the virus can't be killed without killing the cell, only slowed down.
There isn't much for me to say here because it's pretty well done for the most part.
Other
Nice. Not much to say here since these seem pretty reasonable.
Stats
These stats are balanced so I'm cool with them.
Extra
Nice little addition to their relationships, this always helps.
Final thoughts
I like this character, she seems really cool but I might be biased because I love apocalypse stories and ocs. In general, this character is pretty well done but maybe a bit of further development could be useful, but anyway, good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
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