Here is a review for yakuza_midget
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding/character information
She seems pretty cool, there isn't really much for me to say here. I suggest maybe adding more serious traits to her personality and developing her further.
Also 'anything sweet and spicy" isn't a hobby??? So add some more hobbies.
Relationships
These work I suppose as long as they help develop the character further.
Backstory
This works for the character but I definitely recommend adding key events and developing her further in order to add to her character.
Other
This makes sense I guess and there's nothing I can really say here.
Stats
These stats are pretty well balanced so there's nothing I can tell you to improve on here.
Final thoughts
Overall this character is pretty good and I like the sound of her, but she needs some further development and additions to make her even better then she currently is.
Sorry this is short, there isn't too much for me to tell you to improve on.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
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