Book title: Heart of diamondAuthor: -adharawrites-Reviewer: thingybabiby

Before I begin I would like to apologise times a thousand for the delayed review, this is the busiest time of the year for me.

Also, I am not familiar with the fandom, so I am going to review it based on what you write down.

Now without further ado, your review!

Book cover: 8/10

 The cover was certainly interesting and beautiful, the fonts and symbols you used all fit well with it. Though the fact that it looked more like an aesthetic did throw me off a little, and because of the wording was white on white it was a little difficult to read; maybe consider turning it into a simple cover, edit or some other type! Even if you don't, it's still very nice. :)

Book title: 9/10

 It was definitely fairly unique, I have come across books with similar names, but it is very interesting! Also, I'm not sure if it was intentional, but it's a nice twist from the usual 'heart of gold'! 

Blurb: 8/10

It was a nice length and overall great, but it was a little hard to read with the way you worded some sentences. The 'and' in the fifth line could also be removed,

𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚜𝚑𝚎 𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚜𝚎𝚕𝚏 𝚔𝚗𝚎𝚠 𝚝𝚑𝚊𝚝 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚗𝚘 𝚠𝚊𝚢 𝚘𝚞𝚝 𝚘𝚏 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚍𝚎𝚎𝚙, 𝚋𝚕𝚊𝚌𝚔 𝚑𝚘𝚕𝚎 𝚒𝚗 𝚑𝚎𝚛 𝚖𝚒𝚗𝚍 𝚝𝚑𝚊𝚝 𝚜𝚑𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚏𝚊𝚕𝚕𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚒𝚗𝚝𝚘.

𝚂𝚑𝚎 𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚜𝚎𝚕𝚏 𝚔𝚗𝚎𝚠 𝚝𝚑𝚊𝚝 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚗𝚘 𝚠𝚊𝚢 𝚘𝚞𝚝 𝚘𝚏 𝚝𝚑𝚎 𝚍𝚎𝚎𝚙, 𝚋𝚕𝚊𝚌𝚔 𝚑𝚘𝚕𝚎 𝚒𝚗 𝚑𝚎𝚛 𝚖𝚒𝚗𝚍 𝚝𝚑𝚊𝚝 𝚜𝚑𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚏𝚊𝚕𝚕𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚒𝚗𝚝𝚘.

As well as the 'herself' in the second line, if you remove it the others won't make it seem repetitive, and again it is unnecessary.

𝚃𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚗𝚘 𝚍𝚎𝚗𝚢𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚒𝚝, 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚜𝚑𝚎 𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚜𝚎𝚕𝚏 𝚔𝚗𝚎𝚠 𝚒𝚝.

𝚃𝚑𝚎𝚛𝚎 𝚠𝚊𝚜 𝚗𝚘 𝚍𝚎𝚗𝚢𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚒𝚝, 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚜𝚑𝚎 𝚔𝚗𝚎𝚠 𝚒𝚝.

Besides these little things, you wrote the blurb well! It made me wonder how she messed up, and why she had gone through so much pain and suffering; so congrats! 

Opening: 9/10

 Before I get to the prologue, I want to say that your book is very aesthetic! The epigraph was also beautifully written. But you missed (or didn't add) capitals to some paragraphs towards the end. :3

As for the prologue, it was beautifully written; your choice of wording was very nice and anything but bland! I'll provide a few things that could be improved in the next section!

Structure: 17/20
Again your word choices were very impressive and descriptive, your paragraphs were nice readable lengths and your dividers at the beginning and end of each part were a nice touch! The titles were also amazing!

There were a few little things that could be altered, however.

The first thing that could be improved was mainly in your prologue. There were a few phrases and grammatical aspects that could be removed and added, for example.

So painful. Pain enough to break the strongest, to get them on their knees, on the ground, to get them beg for the pain to stop, for it to be gone.

'On the ground' could be removed because it is already assumed that they are on the ground when on their knees, in addition to that it made the sentence seem like it was dragging, only a little. Some words could also be changed to make more sense.

So painful. Painful enough to break even the strongest, to get them on their knees, to get them to beg for the pain to stop, for it to be gone.

Or

So painful. Painful enough to break even the strongest, to get them on their knees and beg for the pain to stop, for it to be gone.

When she was little, she was a cheerful little soul, and even though she had little with her, she had the biggest, most generous heart. She was strong, and she was very, very brave.

You could replace one of the commas with a full stop (or period, whatever you're taught to call them.)

When she was little, she was a cheerful little soul. Even though she had little with her, she had the biggest, most generous heart. She was strong, and she was very, very brave.

The second thing that could be improved is when there is dialogue, you use said very often, and usually in the same format. Like [name] said.

E.gOnce they were comfortably settled, Reyna said, "So, how are you doing? How's spending time with your father?"

You could change the wording, maybe use a different word to describe how they speak to spice it up a little!

"So, how are you doing? How's spending time with your father?" Reyna questioned once they were comfortably settled.

Here a few words you could replace said with! ExclaimedDemandedYelledWailedGaspedQuestionedSuggestedWhispered

Word choice is very important in writing, so make sure you don't use said too often. :)

(I did notice you used other words!)

Other than that, your writing is very interesting and poetic! It deserves some claps. *claps*

Character development: 14/15

You develop Piper very well, showing that she was both strong and prone to weakness at the same time. You don't really develop upon the other characters as much, but you still do enough for me to have a fairly good understanding of what their personality is. I'm sure that it would make a lot more sense for me once I watch the fandom though!

Does it make me want to read more?:  9/10

It does, it makes me want to find out more about Piper and what her nightmares may mean; as well as how she deals and copes with everything that is thrown her way!

Overall, your novel is well written with beautiful descriptions and aesthetic additions that make it even better. With a few tweaks here and there this can truly become a masterpiece! Keep up the amazing work!

14/15

Total: 88/100