I'm back with another review! Wow! You comments section people are really coming through! Before I start, as always, I encourage you to check out their story and profile.
Alright today it will be a story titled The Dinner Date by Chibbi2

So let's start with positives of course!
I flippin' love the fact that it's not another amour fan fiction. I guess that's mostly preference because there are billions of them around compared to pokeshipping. Kudos to that.
I also love the comedy sprinkled in. I'm a person who loves jokes in writing, especially in romance to come lighten the mood. Also one of the best things I've seen happened....

THEY MENTIONED TRACEY!!!!

AND HE GOT TO SPEAK ACTUAL WORDS!
I'm sorry. Tracey's just amazing.

Now the negatives. Here's sorta where things get grey. There's a lot of stuff I could talk about, but that would be a little picky so I'm gonna be brief.
The story bounced all over the place and it was just overall, not well written. Plus the portrayal of some characters was off. I hope this doesn't ruin you day. Sorta why I decided not to go into detail.

Even though there's negatives I can still give a final rating of:

5/10!
5 is halfway there!
I know you'll improve in later stories and don't worry, I don't hate the story. It was still fun to read!
Continue writing and once again check out the author's profile and comment if you want me to review your story.
Ok bye!