Written by: Sarah_Adel2

Reviewed by: jashparikh3

We will start your review in a specific order...

Cover: Beautiful, catchy and those chains stole the thunder. Great creativity. You get 1/1.

Title: Well I don't know why it bears resemblance to Katy Perry song, but it's good. It adds mystery to the book and beautifully compliments the cover. Here you get 1/1.

Description: You are using adjectives in the second line for your protagonist, there it should read 'supportive' and not 'supporting'. Like this there were a few misplaced words, a few grammatical errors as well. After the creative cover and the title, the readers just need one push to tap that read button. Be sure to edit the description and make it grammatically correct. Moving on from the grammar, the plot sounds decent. If there weren't so many errors I would give this book a read. For this you get 0.65/1.

Beginning: You describe the clothes very well. Just like this, you should describe your character. And I mean not how she is but how she looks. Details like her height, eye colour and such, that's how you begin a story. There were comparatively fewer mistakes here so good job. You are young, so I won't expect language and rich prose from you, but it would help if you read more and used some cool sounding words along with describing details. It's your first book and you're only 14 as the first chapter said, then you did not do bad. You need to improve on all accounts like grammar and vocabulary. Don't be too sad that English isn't your first language, mine is neither. You can improve it by reading more and more and using dictionary to find meanings.For these aspects you get 1/2.

Your total score is: 3.65/5. It's not a bad score, especially considering your age.

This book has been reviewed a bit leniently considering the author's age, but not very leniently, maybe a 0.3-0.5 mark difference could have been witnessed in another situation. If there are are questions or queries the author can contact me via PM.