Written by: Visenyatargaryen_12

Reviewed by: jash_parikh

We will start the review in a specific order...

Cover: Simple...but doesn't quite convey those 'fantasy' feels. The title on the cover looks good, but your username would look more suitable at the bottom. For this you get 0.9/1.

Title: Simple, intriguing and creative. You get 1/1.

Description: You used rich language, advertised about your book victories and were grammatically perfect. You have also mentioned your day if updating, which as a reader I would be thankful for. One thing I would say is - you have used formal language keeping in mind the era your story takes place in...Formal language isn't easy to understand if you are using complex long sentences. You might want to shorten the sentences and use richer vocabulary rather than complex style of writing to ease reading while simultaneously sending out the message that your book is a notch higher as far as language is concerned. This is of course merely a suggestion and will not affect your grades. For this you get 1/1.

Beginning: Loved your foreword. Then I fell in love with that warning! You sure know how to make your book look good. Then the epigraph and family tree...hmm nice work on this aspect. You have taken a lot of pains to make your book as relate able to the readers as can be. Coming to the history now. Well begun, the conversation hooked me at the start. Great way to explain the past. Your language and style of writing are very good. However, you have the same problem most fantasy writers have. Lack of description right from the start. How did Edna look like? How did the hospital look like? Did any of the doctors look nervous, scared? Had beads of sweat down their brows ? It's not easy for the world's best doctors to tell a 23 year old beautiful girl she will die even after so many surgeries after all. Of course this is just to make you better, I wouldn't be too concerned about that. Nice work in the later chapters. Excellent shaping of the plot, marvelous style of writing and a very fine character development. All in all I would rate this book a perfect read. A true 'novel', one of the very few on wattpad. for these aspects you get 1.95/2.

Your total score is: 4.85/5. The highest I have given so far, by the way, just in case you're interested.

This book has been judged and graded moderately, meaning neither too harshly nor too leniently. If you have any questions, doubts or queries feel free to PM me.