Written by: Janvi99

Reviewed by: jash_parikh

Hi! We will start the review in a specific order...

Cover: Brilliant. The name if the book, the background the name of the main characters and their fonts - everything is displayed perfectly and fits nicely in the cover. For this you get 1/1.

Title: Too mainstream, too cliche. In how many movies and TV serials have we heard those words in India? A lot. Think something original, your target is obviously only Indians so even they should see something new in the book name right? This is just a suggestion, you can do as you see fit. For this you get 0.65/1.

Description: Avoid words like 'u' and 'ur'. Please, this is a novel not a text message. You are not chatting with your reader, you are writing a book for them. Also, there are a few grammatical errors. There are a few spelling mistakes as well, like knotted is spelled as 'knoted'. I think you should request some outsider to edit your work so that the grammatical and typing errors are corrected. Coming to the creativity, it is good. You have summed up the story very nicely and the best part is the last two paragraphs where you have asked questions to increase curiosity. It is short but to the point which is how it should be. For all these aspects you get 0.65/1.

Beginning: You introduced the characters and also told us something about them. That way we can visualize the whole book like a movie. Great. Then the main chapter. Again you use texting language and there are many grammar mistakes. Indian, so our first language isn't English. That's why I can't blame you. But that doesn't mean others won't right?  So please look for an editor who can reduce these mistakes. Maybe one of your friends who is good at English or some outsider who is your fan...That is up to you.  Creativity wise again you were very good. I loved how Arohi spoke like a kid and how his dad was worried. His mom is just like every Indian mom, worried for her son. I just think that somewhere the book lacks that emotion, that melodrama often associated with Indian daily soaps. This is good no doubt, but you have scope for improvement on that front. Imagination wise, you have a good plot. Avoid the texting language please, that is something you should strictly do. Other than that my advise can be taken as optional. For these aspects you get 0.95/2.

Your total score considering Grammar/texting language: 3.25/5.

Your total score NOT considering Grammar/texting language:  3.55/5.

This book has been reviewed honestly but the grades have been :  moderate in terms of plot and lenient in terms of grammar. If you have any questions feel free to PM me :-)