Title: After Time
Author: @Kei_Angelus
Reviewer: CatLoverHope
Review:
The title of the story matches the writing style well, but I had a hard time relating it to the story, or the plot, as a whole. The cover is good, I like the background, but I think the text kind of ruins the whole vibe of it's beauty. Try changing the position and lighten the colour of the text down a little. The summary is good, but it also is off-putting. I think the author should try using a mysterious way of entrancing the author, try twisting up the words with a simple passive voice, no need for something too complex.
Now, the content of the book: the author's writing style reminds me of the aroma of books, which is honestly beautiful; the author drags on scenes too much though. Sometimes it feels as if there's too little detail, sometimes too much. I think maybe the author should try describing the characters' feelings more, how they feel when near each other, in different places or sceneries et cetera. The cliffhangers are also a little bland without much trace of the characters' emotions or reactions.
I like the fact that the author makes the first few chapters really mysterious, but the thing I just mentioned ruins the whole vibe. I find the division of the past and present memories interesting. Also, I think it would draw the readers in more if the author were to describe the workplace of Jo, the main character, better, along with small hints of her thoughts to it. Also, I think the author should be mindful of where to use active and passive voice; it also takes part in ruining the vibe of the story. Also, the author describes the desperation of the main character to talk to, or interact with Carra very well; maybe try to show subtle signs of Carra responding though. I also like the way the author slowly but steadily tweaks the side characters' personalities in the story as well.
Overall, I think this plot has potential, the author just needs to keep some things in mind while writing. Proofreading should be done not by reading over and over till the author can't understand anything, but keeping small things in mind, like how the author would feel reading that sort of a sentence/paragraph et cetera.