Review on Hostel Life by AkoOku

Debbie life changes when her mun  sends her back to her old boarding school. Debbie, through traumatic experience is suffering Amnesia and has no recollection of her past memories. She is met with Raymond— an old boyfriend, who sets to bring back her past

COVER 📘

Your cover is nice, the fonts that shows the title and author's name. The lady standing on a empty road significantly relates to taking a walk down memory lane which matches with the plot of your story.

TITLE 📘

Your title choice is very intriguing and will capture the eyes of readers passing by. But I think you could have come up with something even better, because it isn't just about how interesting the title is, but how it relates to your story.

Yes, the setting of your story took place in the hostel. But the plot talks about something more deeper than "Hostel Life", if you see what I mean.

Also, it contrast with your cover, because Hostel life doesn't relate to what you have as a cover.

BLURB 📘

Your blurb describes your story in a detailed and intriguing manner. It was detailed in a manner that will make your readers want to know more and turn the pages of your book, good job on this.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMER 📘

This was done nicely, there were still errors I spotted at some areas though.

You should remember that an ellipses is only three dot(...), and when it's more than three, it isn't an ellipses anymore.

Also, note when to put a comma and period at the end of a dialogue. When a dialogue is followed by a tag(eg I said, she said, he replied), then a comma should come before the closing quotation.

But in situations, where an action followed.

"I won't listen to her again." I turned around, walking away as fast as my feet could carry me.

We use a period.

Apart from this, few errors were just fullstop and comma missing in places they should be, but they were very few.

Your grammar was nice and I hardly spotted any errors. If there were any I didn't see them, but while editing, you could check on them again.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT 📘

Good job on this part, I was able to understand and flow with your characters. I like the relationship between Debbie and her brother, Nathan. You also added this sassy humorous personalities in your main characters that I like, good job.

OVERALL IMPRESSION 📘

You have got a really good story going on, and the drama there is really entertaining.

Though some of the event taking place there were unrelatable. Debbie your character was a bit close to becoming unlikeable. The way you portrayed her sassy, I-don't-care personality was almost going over the top.

But all in all, it's fiction anyway. Good book you've got dear.

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This review was to help you and nothing more, wishing you the best.