Author: Miftahul_Eusha

Reviewer: wuwtaetae

BABY KICK

Cover: 9/10

It was very aesthetic, it showed the vampire elements in the story and was relevant. the edit was really good and the font fits perfectly.

Title: 4/5

It was really intriguing, made me interested at the first glance. great choice. it also appeared in the book so it was relevant too.

Synopsis: 7/10

I loved the synopsis but there were grammatical errors there. also, I felt like the first few chapters didn't fit the synopsis at all. the summary looks like it's based on jeongguk's transformation and vampirism and biochemistry yet the story starts and goes on with koushi. if koushi was another protagonist, then she must've been included in the synopsis as much too!

Plot: 25/30

I found it very unique. not a lot of authors write science-based fanfictions but you did and I appreciate you for that! the plot was something I haven't read about yet and that made me want to read further.

Characters: 5/10

The characters were good but I felt like their actions were questionable. some things didn't make sense, I just wish it made more sense.

Grammar: 15/25

I found many grammatical errors inside and it was very distracting. it throws the readers off when authors don't use proper Grammer. also, in some sentences, the formation was bad. make sure to correct them.

Writing style: 5/10

I wouldn't prefer it. I wish your writing had more structure to it overall. I just expected better since it left a good first impression. the paragraphs were big and I wish you'd include the dialogues in the paragraphs rather than just having them lying around in the middle as it'd help with the flow.

Overall:

It's such a good plot, it has potential but please get an editor. I'm sure an editor would help a tonne lot with your book. also, make things make sense, think of what you'd do if you were in the situation and bring it in the book. make the readers feel every emotion. keep writing, you'll do better as days pass by!

Review Scores : 70/100

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