A road to nowhere by: limei_wallim
Requested by: limei_wallim

First off I want to talk about the cover of the book. The cover I thought was good and I liked how it gave off a dark vibe to it to show that it's meant to be a dark story.

Quick side before I talk about the summary. Okay so I noticed that your author's note is labeled prologue and not author's note. I felt like you shouldn't have it titled that cuz it can confuse people into thinking that it's a part of the story. The only time you should have a prologue is unless it's related to the story itself like a flashback or if it connects events much later in the story. So I recommend you should change the title to author's note, not prologue. Also for the note chapter, you could put copyright for it since it's basically just copyright which is pretty much obvious based on that part. Anyways that's all I have to say on that matter. Onto the summary.

Next I want to talk about the summary of the book. The summary I felt was good for a short story but at the same time I felt like it could have been longer. I felt like it was somewhat lacking due to it only having one sentence as the entire summary. If it was a bit longer and told more of what the story was about, it would draw more people in.

Next I want to talk about grammatical errors and writing structure. There were quite a few grammatical errors and I noticed with your sentences that it looked like you tried coming up with words similar to what you were maybe looking for but to be honest, it made a lot of your sentences look awkward and at times a little hard to read. Now I don't know if English is your first language or not, but I would suggest using a dictionary or having someone help you with the sentences since there are many words out there that could make the sentences a whole lot better without making them look awkward or hard to read. I also noticed with your sentences that there wasn't any periods at the end of a lot of them too, so you might want to add a few as well. So I definitely think a bit of editing could help it be better in that regard.

Next I want to talk about the pacing and plot of the story. The plot of the story I thought was interesting. The concept of them getting lost and having to figure out which road to get home was unique especially when there was magical elements thrown in as well. But the pacing of the story I felt was rushed in my opinion. I felt like the story could have been flushed out more if the story was longer and was a normal sized novel and not a short story but of course it was up to the author on how long the story was not me. Just thought I should point that out there.

Next I want to talk about the setting and characters of the book. First I want to talk about the setting of the book. The setting I wish was described more in the story. I felt like there wasn't enough detail to completely imagine on what was going on a lot of the time. Even tho it's a short story, I wished that the story had more descriptions in it to help more of a better picture so I knew what was happening more clearly. A few lines of what the characters were doing I felt wasn't enough to do this sadly. I also wish there was more fantasy elements in the story as well, since it felt more like a horror story than a fantasy short story.

Next is the characters. In all honesty, I didn't like the characters. They felt one dimensional and had little to no personality to them whatsoever. Plus there was the huge info dump in the first chapter of the book that didn't help. I remembered nothing of the characters other than them complaining about being lost like every five seconds and half of them I kind of found annoying. Which is unfortunate cause if the story was longer and more flushed out then maybe there would have been more time to know each of the characters and their personalities rather than just in the first chapter with that info dump. 

Overall, it definitely needs some editing and some reworking to be better and I would recommend it to anyone who loves reading books like it.

Thanks for letting me review your book.

-Traveler_lilly