This Oc belongs to _NebulaSky_

Name: Split
Cool 5/5

Past Names: SplitKit, SplitPaw
Nothing unusual here 5/5

Name Reason: Because of his fur pattern.
A little on the nose, but it makes sense 5/5

Appearance:  Half black, Half ugly brown brown with some tabby markings and green and amber eyes.
I like him being a chimera cat, and the 'Ugly brown' detail is nice too. And his Heterochromia makes sense with the Mother and Father too, but it's a little short. 9/10

Gender: Male
That's what I like to see

Age: 72 Moons
Nice 5/5

Personality: Rude, snappy, loud, and bossy. If you get close enough to him to earn his trust, to you he will be loyal, caring, worrisome, and anxious.
Awww, that's sweet. I like that he puts up a tough front, but is really a cinnamon roll. I would like more but it's still really good 10/10

Sexuality: Demisexual
Gotta love a Demi-boy

Clan: No Clan, just a rouge group.
I'm curious, does this group have a name? 10/10

Rank: Leader's Mate
Why was my immediate thought "Someone's got a Sugar Mommy" I'm sorry 😆 5/5

Mother: ScaleEyes- Doesn't remember, as she ignored him
I like how there descriptions are told from his point of view, but I still wanted the descriptions. Since I already know them from you previous Oc though, I'll let it go.

Father: OwlStrike- A brown Tom with yellow and green eyes and white tabby markings.

Sister: EmptyPaw (To his knowledge)- He doesn't remember her well and thinks her dead, but remembers her black, glossy fur and green eyes.
Ah, so there's her eye color. Same critiques as before so I'll give you the same score. But also +1 bonus point for they way you told their descriptions. 9/10

Crush: His mate, of course! He isn't the type to cheat.
I must protect this Precious Boi. Seriously he's adorable! 5/5

Mate w/ Description: Velcro- A dull gray she-cat with dark green eyes. She has a long bottom jaw, and so a tooth sticking out in the left muzzle. She is covered in little nick scars, and her right ear was torn off.
She sounds pretty, but tough. Though for some reason I keep imagining her with long fur. 5/5

Kits w/ Description: Tin- A Mother copy with her father's Amber eyes. She-cat
Dapple- She looks like her father. Half of her face is gray, the other part brown. She has small black dappled all over her torso, ears, face, and legs. She has pale yellow eyes.
Shell- A dull brown Tom with green eyes. He has pale markings.
I really like all their descriptions! Could use a bit more detail on their body and fur types? but it's good 9/10

Backstory: He was born in (example)Clan with his sister, EmptyKit. As they grew, he grew more and more jealous. She was beautiful, perfect, and good at everything! All he got was and ugly fur color and clumsy paws. When they became apprentices, SplitPaw got BadgerStone as a mentor. Yes, he could have a better mentor, but at least he got one - right? That optimistic feeling changed as he watched little miss Perfect got to be the Leader's apprentice! How unfair was that? They trained hard for a few moons. SplitPaw was very strong in the fighting area, but poor at everything else. EmptyPaw was good at everything, but he knew her weakness: whenever something surprised her, she froze. And so, during one training session with EmptyPaw, he decided to get his claws dirty. He attacked her, and was pretty sure he killed her. SplitPaw ran away, and he changed his name to Split. He joined a rogue group and found a mate their - Velcro. She was a full gray she-cat with green eyes, and they loved each other on first sight. Velcro became the rogue groups leader. They had kits- Tin, Dapple, and Shell. He lived happily.
Woah. That was a roller coaster of emotion. At the beginning I was like "He's so evil!" Then at the end I was like "Awww. He's happy now." Som I'm not sure what to think. The backstory is good, but I think they're could be a lot more detail. Like did he have any friends? Also, did he ever talk to EmptyPaw about his feelings? 17/20

Total: Your total is 99/105! I really like this Oc, but just like EmptyTongue I think he needs more detail. Overall thought it's pretty good. The backstory is interesting and I like his personality. Just flesh it out some more and it will be perfect!