((Forget that announcement I made lol, I figured out how to do it)) for @smexyfirekitten. Next oc will be Berryfall. This is not the same Dreamrunner that I rated before :l also sorry for the lack of updates!! I'm gonna try to get more done lately

Name: dreamrunner

I think this is the first time in this book that we've gotten a repeated name. I guess I can't say that this name is original... I don't like the prefix Dream-. It just doesn't seem warrior-like. As for -runner, it's good, but not original.

Gender: she-cat

Of course

Appearance: black with white and golde tabby stripes. She has mysterious purple eyes and white tipped ears.

This seems... Unrealistic. Dark fur with lighter tabby stripes just seems odd. I think black with white stripes would look fine and really cool, but the gold is just... Too far. I'm not fond of purple eyes, they're possible but they ALWAYS make your oc seem like a Mary-Sue. I'd recommend something like gold eyes instead; it stands out with the black fur, and they're underused.

I like the white tipped ears, keep those :D

Clan: meadowclan

Nice! Not overused, and it makes sense. I assume they live in a meadow.

Rank: queen

Oh good, queens are the best :3

Personality: sweet but can also be very scary if you mess with her only kit. She's very loyal to her clan

Not very much to work with here. I like that she is protective, that's a great motherly trait that isn't used very often. But, I'd like to see some more negative traits. Everyone needs negative traits to balance out the positive. I think something to fit her motherly personality well would be bossy or impatient.

Remember that these are just suggestions!

Backstory: as a kit dreamrunner was always ready to join in a playfull wrestle match with her sister, ravenleap. As she grew up she devoted herself to hunting and helping the clan. One day in a clan meeting, her leader, applestar, introduced the clan to a Tom named crowhunter. A few moons passed and during those moons dreamrunner and crowhunter fell in love, and later had one kit together.

Hmm. It's not very much, her life seems pretty normal. I don't know how you could make a whole story out of this. Is she more of a background character, or is she the main? It's good to see some backstories that aren't full of death and destruction, but there still isn't much to judge here.

Mate and kits name: her mate is crowhunter. He is a dark grayish Tom with black tabby stripes and icy blue eyes. Her kit is jaykit, a light Gray she-kit with white splotches and pretty light green eyes.

Thanks for providing appearances! They seem like a beautiful family. If you have decided, what will be Jaykit's warrior name? Not that it matters, I'm just curious.

.-*OVERALL*-.

4/10. She doesn't really.. Stand out. Her backstory and personality are just kinda.. Boring? Her appearance seems unrealistic. Black with gold stripes just sounds weird. This is the second time I've seen this name in this book, which means it *must* be overused. I'm sorry, but she could use some fixing up o.o