For @darcietheanimelover. Next oc will be Muddystar.

Name- Mossleaf

This isn't the most unique name. I've noticed that a lot of people name their ocs by taking random plant and adding -leaf to the end?

Also I know this name isn't canon, but it is in some warriors sims thing on YouTube :l

Gender-She-cat

Ok :3

Tribe- Hope Tribe

I'm confused about why it's called Hope Tribe. Normally, Tribes/Clans are named for their territory or founder. It doesn't really make sense for it to be an emotion, like hope.

Rank- Warrior

I'm curious about the ranks in this Tribe. They have warriors..?

Personality- Mossleaf is bold but a little shy. She can be quite sassy when it comes to her two enemys of her tribe- Fangpelt and Toothfang.

Eh. How can she be bold and shy? Oh well, I think she needs some more flaws. Everyone is a lil sassy around ppl they don't like, that isn't really a flaw.

Backstory- (in my thing the cats are born with their warrior names) Mossleaf and her twin brother Munlun(pronounced Moonloon) were kits when their parents died by wolves and the wolves took them and her best friend Chainclaw in to train them to kill the tribe cats because of their super powers. The leader Shadepelt found them and took them in. Soon some wolves attacked their tribe and Mossleaf and Munlun's powers were found out as they killed the wolves and fainted. Some rogues came and joined the tribe giving the tribe new kits and warriors as Chainclaw found a mate. Mossleaf then got her first apprentice out of this- Twigtail. And a stronger connection with her mate Thunderstrike.

The names here are confusing. Why does Munlun not have a name like the others? They all have warrior-like names, then there's just... Munlun? Also, do cats know what Chain even means?

I think that having powers is a bit.. meh. It makes her seem like a Mary-Sue. I do like the part about the wolves, I haven't seen that before.

Mate- Thunderstrike

Overused name...

Kits-Tigerfall, Rosetail, Gingerstripe and Wolfheart (Gingerstripe is the only tom)

Rosetail and Wolfheart are canon names. I have an oc named Gingerstripe XD

Mother- Honeydew
Father-Dewclaw

Matching names! Cute!

Siblings-Munlun
Bestfriend-Chainclaw
Munlun and Chaunclaw are named after two of my best friends.

Oh. Their names still don't really make sense.

Appearance- Electric yellow with moss green paws, tail tip and tip of ears. She also has black thunder bolts around her body.

Blah, really Mary-Sue to be honest. This is not realistic at all. Yellow and green?! Cats can't be that color!! Sorry but this bothers me. The thunder bolts also seem really cliche. I am.. annoyed by this.

·~*OVERALL*~·
Honestly, 2/10. I feel bad for being soso mean, but I'm here to give my HONEST opinion. Everything about her screams Mary-Sue. Her fur color is not realistic. The names don't really make sense. Her backstory is kinda meh, I only liked the part about the wolves. Even tho it's really unrealistic. Her name isn't very unique, and she has no flaws. Fix this, please D: