For @somemorebooks again. Next oc will be Gopherstar. It is storming and I'm home alone u_u I've also been sick all day I alMOST PUKED

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Ok again

shadowfrost

I'd usually point out that Shadow- is forbidden but Shadowfrost isn't in a canon Clan so it's cool.

I think Shadow- and -frost are a bit overused, but never too over the top. I've seen this name quite often. No points for originality, but it is cool and it rolls off the tongue easily.

tom

N i c e

dark grey with hazel eyes and one white patch over his left eye. has thick fur and oversized paws.

((OH DEAR GOD YOU GUYS IT'S STORMING SO HARD I THINK THE POWERS GONNA GO OUT AND I AM ALLLOOOONNNE! I AM HEARING CREEPY NOISES IDK WHAT THEY ARE SOUNDS LIKE ALIENS AND I THINK I AM ABOUT TO BE IN A HORROR MOVIE RIP)

I like this! It's pretty simple. I love the hazel eyes, they're underused despite being super common in real life. At first I was like "eh, a patch over the eye isn't the most unique appearance" but the thick fur and oversized paws really add to his appearance, so I like it.

rainclan

RainClan is officially one of the most overused Clan names ok

young warrior

Young! Nice

lively, sometimes says the wrong things when talking to cats, because of his loud nature. he is very distrustful of other cats, even if they are innocent, and is paranoid that cats will distrust HIM because of what his brother did [in backstory], arrogant

Nice! I like this. I love love love this, actually. Don't change it at all. So many things like: lively, arrogant, and distrustful are really underused in personalities.

mate: stormheart

Pretty overused, but oh well.

kits: honeycloud, brightsong [both she-cats], sparkleap [tom]

You don't see these names as often. Honeycloud is a bit overused, so is Brightsong, but I love Sparkleap.

in the clan he has come across as very annoying since being a kit, when he strayed from camp once and caught a bird. this caused him to become arrogant and annoying. his brother [blackwing] betrayed the clan to join another, just after he became a warrior, and told no one, not even his family what he was doing. because of this his father [dustystripe] died because he committed suîcide, as he was ashamed of his son and had always had him as a favourite. his mother [yellowbirch] has become depressed and distant, and has retired early to the elder's den, since she cannot do anything for the clan anymore. shadowfrost found a mate later on and has remained the only generally happy cat of his family, despite being distrustful. he has lived with the clans ever since.

NICE! This backstory is very cool, I haven't really seen something like this before, even though it's so simple. I love the way that his family all reacted to Blackwing leaving. Dustystripe killing himself was unexpected. I like that his personality relies on his backstory, that's good. Overall just really good.

·~*OVERALL*~·
I'm actually surprised I'm saying this, but 10/10! I just really like his personality, appearance, and backstory. I was going to remove a point because his name isn't the best, but I like him too much. Good job!