Wrenchirp

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For @KittyCat13524. Next oc will be Web That Catches Meal and Vine something that I can't remember.

Name: Wrenchirp

Interesting. I like this, I've never seen it before. Wren- isn't used often, and I've never seen -chirp. Great job for originality!

Gender: She cat

Of course..

Appearance: Long haired chocolate brown fur with darker brown muzzle, tail tip, chest, underbelly, ears and paws and has creamy light brown flecks above her muzzle and in her toes, she has very light amber eyes with darker amber streaks.

Very brown. I love it! Brown isn't used very often in ocs, and the different shades of brown make this very unique. This is one of my favorite appearances I've seen. Seriously, awesome!

Clan: FlurryClan

You don't see this often. I like this name.

Rank: Senior warrior

Okay :3

Personality: Can be hyper and annoying around her friends and family, energetic, sensible and stealthy when she needs to be and can also have mood swings.

I'm not seeing many flaws. Mood swings and being annoying are flaws, but they aren't very major compared to her good traits.

Backstory: Was born to her mother Lichenfrond and her father Slatetooth and has two siblings, her brother Jaggedkit and sister Sprucekit. They were kidnapped by rogues whilst exploring out of camp in the middle of the night (because the leader of the rogues was Slatetooth's brother and tryed to kill their sister because she was gonna tell the clan about him meeting a rogue she cat and he was exiled and still held a grudge against Slatetooth because he didn't try to prevent it). There was a huge battle as the rogues were also taking lots of territory so WindClan took the kits as an excuse to attack and many warriors died, including Slatetooth. The kits were stolen back and the rogue group broke up and became loners and kittypets. Lichenfrond became very quiet and avoided other cats (apart from Jaggedkit because he reminded her of Slatetooth) due to Slatetooth's death. The kits were given their apprentice name a few moons later and Wrenpaw began to develop feelings for an apprentice called Burningpaw. They received their warrior names (Wrenchirp, Sprucecone and Jaggedcliff)after an uneventful apprenticeship. A few moons later Sprucecone was attacked by to of the remaining rogues and received unhealable injuries and became a medicine cat apprentice. Lichenfrond died of greencough and Jaggedcliff had an argument with Sprucecone about how she could have saved her and ran away. His body was found caught on a branch in a river and Sprucecone thought it was her fault. Wrenchirp became mates with Burningscratch.

I love this! I like how you added info on her siblings' backstories as well. This is great, I don't have any questions. I like the part about them being kidnapped as kits, not many people add that to their stories. Overall, this is just really good. Don't change it at all :3

Mate: Burningscratch
Kits: Rabbitkit (Rabbitsprint) and Shrubkit (Shrubblade)

Cool names. They're a bit weird but.. cool.

·~*OVERALL*~·
She's cool, 9/10. Just add some major flaws or something, and she'll be good.

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