Name: Ashkit/AshfallPhysical Description: Large, muscular grey Tom with small, flecks or darker grey along his body, a white tail tip and paws. He has blue eyes (when he was born, like all kits) which soon change to yellow-green.

Pretty!

Age: Ashfall is a roleplay / soon to be comic character, so when the roleplay started, he was 5 and a half moons, and as a warrior he is 32 moons.

Cool!

Gender: TomFamily: (Father) Breezetail - Muscular tuxedo Tom with sharp amber eyes.(Mother) Mistystar (my girlfriend's OC) - Blue-grey she-cat with green or blue eyes, white chest and paws.(Sister) Lynxkit/Lynxears (my girlfriend's OC) - Light brown she-cat with darker brown patches and yellow eyes.(Brother) Jaykit - Deceased, grey ticked tabby tom. Died at the age of 1 week from Greencough.

Aww..poor Jaykit :'(

Rank: Kit/Apprentice/WarriorClan: WindClan

Awesome! I don't get to review very many Windclan cats!

Personality: Social, Adventurous, Obvlivious to his surroundings, Rebellious, Slow.Backstory: Still developing

I'd love to see his back story in the future!

Mate/Crush: As a kit, none. As an apprentice, none. As a warrior, he has a mate named Piperfeather.

Good: 

For a cat who doesn't have backstory yet, he's pretty good! I loike his coloring! His descrtion is simple, but i t describes him  without over doing it, and he has a good personality.

Bad:

I do have to take off points for not having a backstory, and if you want, when you finish the backstory you can add it to your form and I can pur it u and review that part! I would also like just a little bit more description of personality, not just a list of words. 

Overall:

8\10 

I love Ashfall, but agian, I did have to take off points for not having a backstory, because its a huge part of any Oc's character.