For @DragonXDaHat

Name: Locus

A pretty name. Fits a RainWing.

Gender: Female

Okay

Tribe: None

None..? She's a RainWing, isn't she? Her parents are.

Rank: None

Explain what you mean by this please..?

Residence: No where

No where? Why? Is she dead? You said that she lives in the Rainforest. I'm so confused..

Appearance: Locus is a vibrant pinkish blue color most of the time. She has abnormally sharp claws because she likes to sharpen them on rocks and her wings are small due to her egg being damaged . Her eyes are green with a hint of blue and she has a scar running down her right hind leg about half a foot in length. Her horns are larger than most colored a light brown.
She wears a flower crown most of the time but when she visits Icewings or Nightwings she takes it off.

Okay. This could use more detail. You could explain her body shape more, like height and weight. And why the flower crown? When does she visit the NightWings and IceWings? That's never mentioned in the backstory. I'd like to know how she got her scar.

I like the detail about her sharper claws.

Personality: Locus is a cold and unforgiving. She loves to mess with others by pranking them. She is a bit childish when around family and loving towards them. She has a bit of trust issues but she is smart. She will not put herself out in the world just for some random dragon. She loves pets so she keeps two scavengers as pets along with a sloth. Her venom is more toxic than others for an odd reason.

She has pet scavengers... but she kills scavengers? That's weird. Why would she terrorize them if she loves them?

This is a very stereotypical villain personality. There's nothing original. I'd add more to this. You can find lists of personality traits online, you should look up one of those and find some traits that would fit her and are more original.

The venom also bothers me. Why does she have more venom? It makes no sense. If your explanation for your character's power is "for some odd reason" either decide what that reason is, or choose a different, more explainable power.

Family: Cactus- Mother: beautiful vibrant Rainwing who is usually a dark blue or light green color with stunning amber eyes
Father-Leech: an usual aqua blue rainwing with light green eyes and mainly has vibrant colors on display
Sister:Grape: usually a dark purple rain wing who wears a feathery head dress and has stunning blue eyes.

Okay. Pretty normal names here.

(I wasn't able to copy & paste the backstory because it was "offensive" so here's a screenshot)

This could use a lot of work. I like the adventurous spirit, you could add that to the personality. I don't think that being made fun of will just turn a dragon into a cold blooded killer. That makes no sense. She should have a motive for killing dragons. Maybe she hates dragons of a certain Tribe kind of like Darkstalker hates IceWings. Maybe she has a grudge against RainWings because she was made fun of and is seeking revenge. "Her own satisfaction" just seems like a poor explanation for becoming a serial killer.

I really don't like the sudden unexplained switch back into being a normal dragon. Again, give her a motive for that. Maybe she's reunited with an old friend or family member. It doesn't make sense otherwise; a serial killer isn't just going to be like "oh, maybe killing people isn't a good thing after all!"

It's odd that the RainWings just accepted her in. I get that they don't know she's a murderer, but surely if twenty five dragons died, there had to be news somewhere that there was a serial killer on the loose. If she's killing people with her venom, then it would be obvious that the victims were killed by a RainWing.

Overall
I give Locus a 1/10. She seems like what people call an "anti-sue," the opposite of a Mary Sue. Instead of being perfect, she's just pure evil for no reason. I'd add a LOT to this OC. Her appearance is alright, just make it more detailed. Add some to her personality so that she seems more original. At the moment, she just seems boring, like every other poorly written Wings of Fire villain. As for the backstory, add a motive to her killing besides satisfaction and the fact that she was bullied. Maybe elaborate on the extra strong venom thing, it could make for an interesting story.

Here's an idea: Maybe she was born with too much venom, like a SkyWing can be born with too much fire. Because of this, she was ostracized from the other RainWings. She starts killing scavengers because she has been treated like a monster her whole life and doesn't know any other way to let out her frustration. She loves killing scavengers so much that she starts killing dragons. Then maybe she meets a dragon who doesn't hate her. Maybe they relate to her, being a firescales or animus or whatever. She realizes that she isn't a monster and turns good again.

That's a very basic idea, but it still offers more explanation for her motives than her current backstory does. I'm not here to write your character for you, but you can do with this what you want.

Anyway, yeah, this character could use a lot of work. I'm sorry if I offended you, I don't mean to sound so rude, but this is my honest opinion.

Bye :3