Void

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For @BraydenWoolley 

Name | Void

I guess this is a NightWing name? Idk, but I like it. I haven't seen it before, and it's cool.

Gender | Male

Ok

Tribe | Nightwing

NightWings are way overused tbh, but that's alright

Rank | Watcher [Scout/Defense]

Haven't seen that before! Cool.

Residence | Rainforest Kingdom [Rule of Queen Glory]

Queen Glory is the best queen

Appearance | Black scales that are littered with random silver-white scales, dark purple underbelly and a mixture of black, dark blues and purples. It's almost impossible to locate him during night which helps with his rank and hunting, he has glowing purple eyes that have a strange glint in them that hint at his powers.... he has a muscular build and a large scar across his right eye and large, flowing wings. Obsidian colored rings cover his left horn and his tail, the one thing that disrupts his night-camouflage is a ruby that hangs from a silver chain around his neck, more on that later.

That's really detailed, I like it! He is a typical NightWing (which is a good thing– I don't like when people make dragons that don't even look like the Tribe they're supposed to be) but he is also pretty unique. I like the extra bit about the ruby, that's cool :3

Personality | He's usually shy and is a quiet dragon, reasons in backstory, but is fun to be with. He's a curious soul that loves to joke about, he's fierce in battle and enjoys the hunt.

Aw I like him. I'd add a few more flaws– but this is actually pretty good. The last bit is is pretty underused, I've seen, so good job!

Family | Father: Morrowseer, yes THE Morrowseer
Mother: Midnightsong
Siblings: Dusklight [Deceased]
Mate: A Rainwing named Apricot

Oh god I forgot about Morrowseer, don't make me think about him

Backstory | Void was born under 3 full moons, granting him the gifts/curses of Mind-reading and Future-sight, at the age of 8 he had his first insight of the future, he saw his brother get killed and left to find him, he was killed by a group of Icewings. In a rage Void fought and killed the Icewings , earning a scar and the title 'Frostfang' he carried his brother back to the Rainwing Kingdom, he was highly respected by most but since that day he stays quiet. Until he met a Rainwing named Apricot, they fell in love and lived happily. When he thought back to his brothers death he clutched the ruby that was around his neck and repeatedly says 'it wasn't your fault, I'll miss you brother'

I really like this. There's only one major event (his brother dying) which makes the backstory simple and easy to follow. I usually find powers (mind reading and future sight) a bit boring and overused, but this works. You didn't overdo it.

Other | He ended up having two children, a Nightwing son, Scythe and a Rainwing daughter, Hope.

I'm so happy for him :3

Overall
8/10. His name doesn't seem very... NightWing-ish, but that's okay I guess. The rest of him is great, except you could be a bit more descriptive of his personality. Overall he's pretty good.

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