Author: @Magiclairex

Summary: "Living alone in New York City, Alana struggles to keep up with her witch apprenticeship while proving to her family that she is not, in fact a disappointment. However, Alana is hieing a big secret that could get her kicked out of her apprenticeship, and happening - even if that means getting involved with a magical black market that could not only get her kicked out of the witch community but also disowned by her family.

Needless to say, she's in a little over her head"

Reviewer's remarks: What I've noticed right away was the length of the chapters- they were just huge. When I'm reading a long chapter is harder for me to concentrate on it and to not get pulled away (I read "on the run"). One of the books chapter could totally fit into two medium chapters.

And let's see what's in these huge chapters - details. Details everywhere. The reader doesn't like completely EVERYTHING being told to him and that what's the writer is doing right here. He/she tells every basic movement characters does. I also have my own imagination and I want while reading to actually use it.

On the other hand the writers details turns into an advantage when she/he starts describing people. It's amazing! I could actually see the character that the writer is speaking about and imagine them doing something!

Another advantage is the mystery - I never knew what will happen next. The plot is really good.

Rating (out of five): 4

A note to the author: Although you're doing your best writing this story you cross a line. You're being too detailed in your chapters and then they become huge and you must agree that long chapters are very hard to read. Although the detailed writing turns into an advantage at some points, you should fix the places where it turns into disadvantages.

Reviewer: Alan247