Author: books_by_New

Title: With Love

Summary: Will Love Conquer 

Christine Mavis had something no one else had. A strong relationship with her dear grandmother. Since she was just a toddler, Christine could remember spending summers in California with her loving grandma, as well as visiting her Uncle Todd, and her grandmother's younger brother, Larry. But as Christine's 15th birthday rolls around, she begins to question how much longer their relationship will last, after all, how many teenagers and grandmothers get along? So with this, Christine decides to find herself, by taking a trip to Half Moon Bay, California; before her friendship collapses, and she looses one of the most important people in her life, her grandma, Laura. Christine will teach all of us the importance of family, friends, and God. And that grandmas are angels sent to give wisdom, fun, and most importantly, love.

Reviewer's remarks: 'With Love' is a general fiction novel which revolves around a pubescent fifteen year old protagonist, Christine Mavis.

I love how the story portrays a young teenage girl's relationship with her grandmother - whom she refers to as 'Ma'. Upon growing up, Christine questions their relationship as to wether their bond will last.

However I was unable to decipher wether Christine was currently living with her grandmother or if she was visiting her for the summer. I wish the author would've offered a faint character sketch and described Christine's background (i.e: Where her parents are? Is she under the care of her grandmother? What special traits her loved ones posses? e.t.c)

I appreciated the concept of going on an excursion to California - however I was under the misconception that Christine herself wanted to take an evanescent escape from her life and decided to undertake the journey to California. The author, in my opinion was vague about these details which left me unsatisfied.

I was hoping there would be a mention further into the book regarding our protagonist's background - not knowing this impacted on my dissatisfaction.

Another detail I would like to point out was James's character. I would've liked more than a nebulous description regarding his character.

I cannot complain about the author's writing style - since they offered such exquisite graphic representations of the character's emotions and the story's whereabouts. There were a few errors in spelling such as when the author referred to Erin 'kicking a ball' but instead it mentioned her 'killing the ball'. Such errors, although minute took me a while to comprehend the sentence (though I managed).

The story has potential. The plot is intriguing and appealing to a reader (such as myself). The author's writing style is also delightful and the protagonist's sarcastic remarks and retorts are very engaging. My only concern is the proper development of characters and how they should be introduced to the story.

Rating (out of five): 3

Note to the author: As I mentioned above your story has a lot of potential. I did enjoy the story but I really wanted to know more about the character's in it. As an avid reader, I find such reads delightful in which I can relate to a character. I would've also liked to visualise a stronger bond between the grandmother and Christine.

The issue you must tackle while composing a story of any sort must be 'character development.' An easy way to do this would be by roughly noting down 'character sketches'. You should also include the character's back story as this will assist the reader(s) in comprehending the story.

I really liked the idea of your book and your manner of writing. It was an enjoyable read.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/45994559-with-love