By PinkCottonClouds

I'm so sorry for the tardiness! I still hope you appreciate it.

Title: It's curious. I mean, it catches readers' attention and makes them want to read it.

Blurb: It's short and simple, perhaps a little too much. Maybe you could've added a few more details. Though, you at least avoided info dumping pointlessly.

Cover: It's simple and it seems to fit the story's theme, for now, but the title is a little difficult to read. Maybe you could've made it more readable? (Well, unless someone else made it for you.)

Plot: You openly said it's loosely inspired by a movie, right? I haven't watched it, so I can't relate to it. Speaking of the plot itself, however, I like how you developed scenes and characters so far in these three chapters. Maybe the abuse scene was a little too abrupt for my liking, you could've expanded on it a little more. On the other hand, I appreciated the setting and the MC's approach to his fellow characters.

Grammar: Grammar doesn't seem to be a major issue in this story, but I noticed several small typos, such as misplaced punctuation signs, unnecessary capitalization of letters and one particular case: you write "Mr.Chandler" or "Mr.Elliot" as if it were only one word. There should be a space after the dot.

Overall rate: 7.5/10

Would I recommend reading this story? If I were you, I'd give it a try. I like how it focuses on the main protagonist's interaction with the setting that surrounds him. It's perfect for you if you like stories about self-discovery. It's a shame that it's basically on hold...