Title: CocytusAuthor: 

Reviewer: thingybabiby

Before I get started on the review I'd just like to apologise for the wait! I'm really sorry, things happened and I couldn't find time to do it sooner!

Now without further ado, your review. I hope you like it!

Book cover: 9/10

 It looks very nice, the font and colour schemes work very well together and everything is well placed! It's not particularly eye-catching like other covers but it is still very well made!

Book title: 9.5/10

I hadn't looked at the description before this, so I was a little confused. At first, I didn't understand it as I didn't know what the word meant (cuz I'm a little dumb :3) But after a little bit of research, I immediately had two reactions.

1: You're smart

2: That's so cool, like wao!!

I then read the description and realised that it was the boat's name. It's very nice and fitting!

Blurb: 9/10

 It's well written, and the little quote at the start also caught my attention. I thought that the extended description about the captain's sister was a little unnecessary and could instead just be included in the actual chapters, though it's still interesting! (I wonder if anyone's going to break through that heart of stone)

The description is neat and a great length, not too long and not too short. *claps*Also, congrats on all of those placings! Very impressive!

Opening: 9.5/10

From the first paragraph, I could tell you were an amazing author. You used so many great language techniques like alliteration and personifications, which made me want to continue reading more of your amazing writing. There were a couple of words that I believe weren't in the correct tense like dragged in the second paragraph.

"...but still arrived to watch the big ship dragged down the river."

"...but still arrived to watch the big ship drag down the river." The descriptions were so vivid and amazing, I almost felt like I was there myself, watching as a crowd member.Ps: The quote and banner are both excellent additions!

Structure: 18.5/20

The titles were all very interesting, I know how difficult it can be to find fitting titles and I think that you chose well!

The paragraphs were great lengths, and again your descriptions and use of language techniques were so so good; it's no wonder why you received so many placings! I felt like some of the sentences in the first two or so paragraphs were fairly long, but later on, in the book, you shortened them well and balanced most of them out. In the second paragraph of the first part, you also used a semicolon and straight afterwards."...those who believed in their mission; and those who knew nothing of their journey..."A semicolon has two main purposes. It is a replacement of and, or, but etc, as well as a way to link two complete sentences. By using the and you defeat the purpose of the semicolon. I suggest that you use a comma instead! Always keep in mind that when you use a semicolon, the second phrase should still be able to stand on its own even without it. I hope that this makes sense...For example, "My teacher is wonderful, and she makes everything easy to learn."
"My teacher is wonderful; she makes everything easy to learn."

Character development: 14/15

 There isn't much to say about this. You develop your characters well and give each of them their own unique personality through their actions and words.

Does it make me want to read more?: 9.5/10

Most definitely! Your descriptions and plot are amazing, dramatic even! I can't get over how well you write!!

Overall, I could tell that you spent a lot of effort and dedication on your writing. Everything is so amazing, I just can't believe how talented you are! Just keep an eye out for little mistakes and grammar. :3
14.5/15

Total: 93.5/100