Writer: Furashu

Book: Toxic

Reviewer: Queen__Chaos

Book Cover: 8/10

I really liked the cover to be honest. It's simple, catchy and totally the ones that hook me, not to mention that the face claims are very *ahem* attractive, but I deducted a few points because the symmetry is off, can you just shift the guy a bit into the frame too? Just a teeny bit? Otherwise it's perfect!

Book title: 8/10

Mhmm, relevant to the story and very eye catchy, because I personally like anything dark, be it romance or gory murders, so a title like this will definitely get me interested, but, well there are a more books with the same name, not that it bothers me. What's important to me is that it has to be relevant and not a page long, and 'Toxic' fits both bills.

Blurb: 7/10

Not gonna lie but it had my attention. The second line especially, though I did have to read it twice because of the sudden clutter of names, but it sure made me go 'The hell?' and get interested. I deducted a few points because when I read the story I found that the dialogue has some more lines in between, and I feel that when you put an excerpt of the book in its blurb it should not miss a couple of few lines even though it seems more compact that way. But it is my personal opinion, so don't fret over it lol. Overall, it was quite attractive because frankly I was so tired of huge huger and hugest summaries that yours came as a refreshment. Loved the shortness and the ability to get you hooked.

Opening: 9/10

Very strong opening, really, it was lovely to read. More so because it was so detailed, the friendship between the female protagonist and her best friend was so heartwarming. Every scene was described to the fullest and frankly it was perfect. I loved how you focused on every small thing!!

Structure: 17/20

Very neat to be honest. I never for once felt that 'this paragraph is so long' or 'woah, that was abrupt'. So it was pretty much ideal for me because I personally suck at them.

Character development: 11/15

I read just five chapters and to be honest there was character development even though it felt a bit abrupt but well hey, it's a story and it's up to the writer as to how fast he/she wants to make the characters grow, so just make sure that the readers don't feel like they are on a roller coaster ride. That's all :)

Does it make me want to read more? 14/15

There's not much to write here because I love the genre the story is set in, not to mention the writing flows very well. So it's definitely an YES!

Overall impression: 12/15Well, very nice story to be frank. I am loving this a lot mostly because of *ahem* Sven, not to mention that the story is very attractive, eye catchy and definitely original. The characters are well written and the descriptions are simply awesome. It needs a teeny bit more editing but except that it was fantastic. And about the editing, some punctuations are off at places and I would love it if you stop repeating words. Like in the prologue instead of 'Even though Anthony is in grade 12 and I am in grade 10" you can just cut the second 'grade' and make it "even though Anthony is in grade 12 and I am in 10", because repeating words take off the charm, there were some more if you check it once more.

Also in the prologue, '"Oh... that" Erna says dumbfounded", I don't think 'dumbfounded is the correct word, shouldn't it be 'surprised' or something of that sort because 'dumbfounded' here means that she already knows what happened and then is in shock which is not the case. And the last thing is that you write the book in present tense, I don't mind that at all just make sure you continue that because there were some wrong tenses used too.

Total: 86/100

So just a bit of editing and your book will be perfect. It's awesome in itself so keep up the good work :)