Name: Nopal

(cool name)

Gender: Female

(Alright)

Tribe(s): SandWing and NightWing (she doesn't know about the NightWing part)

(How does she not know about her NightWing blood? Does she just take after a SandWing more and plays it off as being unusual?)

Sexuality: Straight

(Okay)

Personality: Grumpy on the outside, but has a sweet spot for dragonets and her friends

(She definitely needs a more developed personality)

Backstory: Growing up in the scorpion den alone? Not fun. But that was Nopal's childhood. She made up some parents so she could go to school when she was 5. She and Scale, her human, went to Jade Mountain.

(That's it? needs a lot more details)

Abilities: Foresight

(So your telling me she has no clue of her NightWing blood and yet has and is aware of being able to see the future and she doesn't have any other abilities like fire that both tribes have?)

Likes: Dragonets and singing (secretly) fighting

(okay, she had a good variety of likes, but could use some more)

Dislikes: Let's just say a lot

(That tells me nothing about what she doesn't like)

Other: No other

(If there was no other then you didn't have to write this down, I probably should have specified that)

I rate her 3½/10, she has a very common and a bit overused personality, she needs a more detailed/developed backstory, more abilities like she would probably have fire because both SandWings and NightWings have it so she's a underpowered rather then overpowered. She also needs more specific dislikes and maybe a few more likes.