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Client: VeraChendra

How it felt like when I was reading your book:


TITLE

Perfect! It is a unique title and its rareness alone is excellent enough to capture a reader. So good job on that!

BLURB

The blurb was fantastic! My only suggestion would be to omit words that could make the blurb seem longer than necessary.

Example: Dr Meera Saravana, the lady with the blue ribbon has been on the run for the last ten years. She ends up in New York, hoping that everything will work out this time. But that's turning out to be impossible as she gets involved with the famous or infamous, depending on who you're asking-Farewell Family. Ivan Farewell, the man with the bloody face, inherited a legacy from his father, who was brutally murdered a year ago. The Farewell family has operated and has been part of the underworld for almost four generations but Ivan, unlike his father, can't prevent a war. All he can do is fight back or lose the only family he has left. Blood, secrets, love, and promises meant to be broken. How will two opposite souls meet in a world that threatens to come undone like a frayed ribbon?

It has the right amount of tags as well. I would suggest adding thriller or other relevant tags near it to suit its algorithm.


COVER

The red and blue hues match perfectly with the story! The choice of calligraphy for the title is excellent and the author's name is clearly visible so good work on that too!


PLOT AND GRAMMAR


1. Using Ellipsis

 In Chapter 1, there was an exaggerated sentence of No. Usually, it is followed by 3 dots and not more than that.

Another instance where the dots could be eliminated:

I didn't feel excited or frightened or melancholic. I only knew what being numb felt like.

Just remember that whenever '...' is used in a sentence, just limit it to 3 dots. ♥

2. There was another instance where capital letters were not necessary.

Example: But so much blood had been split...


Other than that, there weren't any grammatical errors that I needed to nitpick on xD It seemed to be polished really well. I enjoyed the banter between the brothers and how one of them felt like the third wheel during the conversations.


OVERALL

Another thing I believe is worth mentioning is the diverse characters. I am sure every girl with the name Meera would be really glad for this book. I see more of an action-packed thriller as the story progressed. I would highly recommend joining book clubs to get more exposure to the book. 

Good luck with all future projects VeraChendra ♥

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